Kenpachi Masamune

A chorus of singers Raptured and gentle. (Raptured....this seems unusual with the definition of the word) The rhythm conducting their movement: An electric pulse compels. All that hath life and ...

bête noire she calls them stones around her neck, stones around her neck, not pieces of diamond (stones is repetitive) and jade, but of imperfected rock. (imperfect) their little chubby, ...

Fian is the town in the Polek Mountains. Clausek is the eldest son of the Sevek family. He is fifteen years old. Belvil is a town that was on the ...

Golden Goddess, (Golden fruit....oranges? Apricots?) Perched in the air, (Orchids obviously) We reach out to her (Picking them.) And she grants us life. (Healthy...) Oranges? While not as obscure as ...

Not to sound harsh, but I REALLY don't think this is a good idea for her parents to read. It may sound like a nice thing to do, but I ...

Author's Note: This is essentially the prologue, but I am foregoing that and letting everyone get straight into the story. It has some necessary info-dumps, but weaved directly into the ...

My family is special to me and all (bad opening line, unoriginal) When we trip, our family lift us from our fall ( when is repeated too much in this ...

To be truthfully honest (4) What people say (3) Does not matter anyway (4... good) What you do (3) Can only be judged by you (6) And that is very ...

My eyes peel back (peel is odd...but ok) And I stare out yonder. (yonder is old and old times) My sword twitches. (....magically?) I see no tomorrow, Just an end ...

1. These ruby eyes the blood of life withouth them (without) the red star cannot exsist (exist) nor can anything that lives or breaths (breathes, not breaths) The eyes are ...

That is a lot of smilies....I didn't know we had that many. Never used many of them, to be perfectly honest. Welcome to the site, and please don't abuse smilies ...

I taste blood. -fine That fist that met my cheek, -agreed on repetition of that. was it really his? - fine It couldn’t have been… - fine strong hands grasp ...

It won't work for me...will there be an equivalent like %20 for space users? Part of the safe URL coding. %20 being the safe representation of a single space. doesn't ...

He cannot confess what he has not done (fine) during his trial underneath the sun. (fine) And yet enduring his burden he smiles, (fine) making his troubles seem gray and ...

Editing is usually 2-3x the length of the writing for me. So if I wrote a 50k word story in a month, it would take me three months to edit ...